Just finished reading the essay, @Canadian National Guard . On the whole, it doesnt exactly light a fire under my ass to join the movement. While the intentions are generally in alignment with my values, the language is underwhelming. Theres a lack of voracity that I believe is needed to tackle these issues. You've got the right idea in making a call to action, yet the call isnt LOUD enough. My advice would be to use hard language, because this endeavor is going to require people to endure some very difficult challenges. Keep on keeping on CNG
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Can you give an example of increased voracity? How can the call be louder? It’s a bold initiative. Bold language is needed.
Plz give a few sample sentences using hard language
Thank you 🫡
Did you read v939,002?
It’s the most recent version
Previous version was soft and lacking substance
v939,002 was basically a complete rewrite and much more to the point using simpler language to optimize for substance
The essay is a dynamic document. Always being interated, always being scrutinized so we can forge maximum potency together
Thank you for your input 🧡